08 February 2016

Honourable mentions, Challenge Sentence #34

My entries in last week's edition of Marcia Riefer Johnston's writing/editing game Tighten This! won honourable mentions.

Challenge Sentence #34 read:
As the warm-water tank of the hot-water system is used, the temperature of the warm water may become lower if it is continuously used.
My proposals were:
Warm water: The more you use, the lower the temperature.
and
Warm water: Continuous use, lowers the temperature.
The winning version was:
Hot water runs cold with overuse!

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